my holiday
WALT -we are learning to write,edit and recraft our writing
To write my story I made a plan at the top of the page. Then I wrote my story underneath the green writing shows the editing and the I have done and the red parts show what Mr Masters helped me with.
Yay what a great day, my cousins, mum,
dad, Kellyann, Bostin and I are going to have together.
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First ^ got drss into some nice, cool clothes, tie up my
hair into a ponytail and eat weekbicks for beakrist. When
everyone was ready we what to town, Yay! I thought.
We drove in our old, red monster truck. When
everyone was buckled up the truck Started and
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off we whet to the market. When we first got there we
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looked around the place, so many things to she. I pushed
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around my little cousin Harvey in a pram. Harvey was lazy
in his pram. “ laugh out loud” I thought. Time to
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go to collards for lunch. When we got ther they said it will
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take a while for the kichen to open so we
Hopd into the old red monster truck. So we are now
going to waipapa pub for lunch. we finally got there. there
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was a
free game machine there, I had so much fun on it.
Kellyann and I shared wedges, Yum!. Then it was Time to
go see Grandma at the ceamatry . I gave her some pink,
Little diamond things. it was time to go home to have
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dinner and settle down for bed.
Reflection- Editing my work was hard, but writing the draft recount was easy
What did you do on the holiday ?
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